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Chapter 1
rewritting

Chapter Description: I am rewriting a lot of the chapters because usually I just rush through them, but now i am going back and adding more details and what not to hopefully make the story a little better... please give feedback at what I am doing wrong, what I could work on, any mistakes you see that could be fixed. Even if you rip me apart and call me shit please still tell me what i can do better. Don't worry about hurting my feelings I want to become a better writer and I need to know what i can do to achieve that goal. CH-1 rewritten CH-2 rewritten Ch-3 rewritten Ch-4 rewritten Ch-5 rewritten-Still adding more to this chapter just a done rewriting up to the current point.

I am rewriting a lot of the chapters because usually I just rush through them, but now i am going back and adding more details and what not to hopefully make the story a little better... please give feedback at what I am doing wrong, what I could work on, any mistakes you see that could be fixed. Even if you rip me apart and call me shit please still tell me what i can do better. Don’t worry about hurting my feelings I want to become a better writer and I need to know what i can do to achieve that goal.

CH-1 rewritten

Ch-2 rewritten

Ch-3 rewritten

Ch-4 rewritten

Ch-5 rewritten-Still adding more to this chapter just a done rewriting up to the current point.